Analyze and tell me from your perspective the meaning of the song I wrote.
I have two different set of lyrics. An original and the revised one.
I honestly don`t think either are good enough. Its not meaningful nor poetic enough.
Please dont change too much of the lyrics but revise ( change some of the lyrics completely) it and give the lyrics feel and a sad, relief, and happy feel.
Keep the structure the same on the revised one and give these song life.